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Old 01-06-2006, 08:35 AM   #1
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The Legend of Zelda: Newfound Powers

I decided to tell about my story, which is called "The Legend of Zelda: Newfound Powers". It is posted on ZU, but sadly, I couldn't get any chapters saved to it for some reason. I left it there though. I suggest you read this story, it's really good. Since I can't get any chapters on it in ZU, I posted it in fanfiction.net. My name in that website is Hylian, just to tell you. I also use that name in the chatroom. The story only has four chapters now, but I'm currently working on the fifth one. To get to the fanfic, go to fanfiction.net and go to the Zelda category in the game section and scroll down the list of stories untill you find this one and click. When you read it, tell me what you think of it here or send me a review in fanfiction.net. Here's the full prologue:

It's been seven years since Link saved Termina and he had been searching for Navi since then. He finds her alright, but just as he was about to return to Hyrule, he meets Kelli, the destined Guardian of the Sun. She tells him Ganondorf had returned and kidnapped the six sages and Princess Zelda. The sages were imprisoned and Zelda was put into a deep sleep. In order to free the six sages and awaken Zelda, Link had to gain the power of the moon and conquer his greatest fear: the fear of being loved. Can Link learn enough about the powers of the sun and moon to be able to destroy Ganondorf forever?

Well what do you think? This is just the prologue. The story is great. It has action, romance(which comes in the end between Link and Zelda), a little bit of humor and fantasy, and some surprising things. In the story, Link visits new dungeons and meets up with all new dungeon bosses and learns one new song and gets a few new items. So what do you think?
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I decided to tell about my story, which is called "The Legend of Zelda: Newfound Powers". It is posted on ZU, but sadly, I couldn't get any chapters saved to it for some reason. I left it there though. I suggest you read this story, it's really good. Since I can't get any chapters on it in ZU, I posted it in fanfiction.net. My name in that website is Hylian, just to tell you. I also use that name in the chatroom. The story only has four chapters now, but I'm currently working on the fifth one. To get to the fanfic, go to fanfiction.net and go to the Zelda category in the game section and scroll down the list of stories untill you find this one and click. When you read it, tell me what you think of it here or send me a review in fanfiction.net. Here's the full prologue:

It's been seven years since Link saved Termina and he had been searching for Navi since then. He finds her alright, but just as he was about to return to Hyrule, he meets Kelli, the destined Guardian of the Sun. She tells him Ganondorf had returned and kidnapped the six sages and Princess Zelda. The sages were imprisoned and Zelda was put into a deep sleep. In order to free the six sages and awaken Zelda, Link had to gain the power of the moon and conquer his greatest fear: the fear of being loved. Can Link learn enough about the powers of the sun and moon to be able to destroy Ganondorf forever?

Well what do you think? This is just the prologue. The story is great. It has action, romance(which comes in the end between Link and Zelda), a little bit of humor and fantasy, and some surprising things. In the story, Link visits new dungeons and meets up with all new dungeon bosses and learns one new song and gets a few new items. So what do you think?

One question: Why would Link fear being Loved? It would make more sense if the story twisted it so that Link's fear was LOSING the one he loves if he suceeds in stopping Ganon this time round. But, it's your story, so take it away, can't wait to see where it leads.^_^
Oh, and you could alway's use copy&paste to get the other chapters posted here on ZU.^_^
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One question: Why would Link fear being Loved? It would make more sense if the story twisted it so that Link's fear was LOSING the one he loves if he suceeds in stopping Ganon this time round. But, it's your story, so take it away, can't wait to see where it leads.^_^
Oh, and you could alway's use copy&paste to get the other chapters posted here on ZU.^_^

Um...no. I don't like writing stories where Link would lose the one he loved. And besides, it's my belief. I think Link fears being loved because I think he doesn't know what love is or what it feels like. So, near the end of the story, Link finds out what love is and what it feels like and will no longer be afraid. I guess I should copy and paste since I can't get the story on ZU. Well, here's chapter one. Hope you like it.

The Legend of Zelda: Newfound Powers
Chapter 1: A surprising return

It’s been seven years since Link saved Termina and he had been searching for Navi since then. Link had been riding Epona through a dense forest searching. All of a sudden, when Link was beginning to think he’d never find Navi, he saw a bright bluish-white light floating between the trees. The light came closer and soon enough, Link noticed wings on it. Navi!
“Navi, is that you?”, Link asked.
“Yes, Link it’s me!”, Navi replied, happy to see him again.
“I’m so glad to see you again. Where’ve you been all these years? Why’d you even leave me in the first place?”, Link asked.
“I had to. You’re a Hylian. Hylians don’t need fairies”, Navi explained. “I decided to go back to the forest after you returned the Master Sword. I started to miss you so I then I decided to go see you again. I learned you had left Hyrule in search of me, so I thought I should look for you too”.
“I understand. You’re right. I’m a Hylian. But I’ve always thought of you as...a friend”, Link said.
“I’ve thought of you as a friend too, Link. Now that we’ve found each other, it’s time we returned to Hyrule”, Navi proclaimed.
“Let’s go then. I want to go back too”, Link agreed as the two of them started back.

Link had only trotted Epona a few feet when he heard the sound of a horse’s hooves. The hooves grew louder until Link noticed a palomino horse with a rider galloping towards him. The rider was a girl who looked about Link’s age. She wore a black head band in her somewhat long hair that was as golden as his own. Link noticed at the girl’s back was a sword and shield. He also noticed her eyes were as blue as his. The girl slowed her horse down to a trot and then stopped in front of Link.
“Link, I am Kelli and I was sent to find you because something terrible has happened in Hyrule”, the girl said.
“How do you know my name?”, Link asked, surprised.
“I have ways of knowing these things. Now please come with me back to Hyrule before it’s too late!”, Kelli insisted.
“What happened?”, Link asked, wanting to know.
“Somehow Ganondorf came back to seek revenge on you and Zelda”, Kelli explained. “He’s imprisoned the six sages and kidnapped her again. And along with kidnapping her this time, he cast a spell on Zelda, putting her into a deep sleep and locked her up in one of the towers of the castle”.
“Oh no, this is not good. How can I awaken Zelda?”, Link asked.
“The spell can only be broken by a hero’s kiss”, Kelli replied.
“You mean I have to…”, Link started.
“Kiss her, yes”, Kelli finished for him.
Then they rode off. Link blushed at the thought of having to kiss Zelda since he did like her, but it wasn’t exactly love. Link had always been nervous about kissing any girl, let alone Zelda.

Sometime later, when the two of them finally arrived in Hyrule, Link noticed the drawbridge that led into Hyrule Castle Town was broken again after it had been fixed.
“Ganondorf broke the drawbridge again didn’t he?”, Link said.
“Yes he did Link. Now the first thing we have to do is see the King so he let everyone know that you’re here now”, Kelli told Link.
“But if Ganondorf took over the castle again, where’s the King?”, Link asked.
“Ganondorf had locked him in the dungeon of the castle and we have to get him out so he can tell everyone, who fled to Kakariko Village again, that you’re here”, Kelli answered. “Let’s go”.
Then they started toward town.
“Oh by the way Link, my horse’s name is Sunfire. Isn’t she pretty?”, Kelli asked.
“Yeah. Nice name too”, Link replied. “It matches her color”.
“Yeah, that’s why her name is Sunfire”, Kelli agreed.
“Where did you get her?”, Link asked.
“She used to belong to the castle”, Kelli explained. “But then she ran away. I found her and returned her to the castle. Zelda was so grateful, she let me keep Sunfire”.

Once they arrived at the broken drawbridge, Link and Kelli got off their horses and crossed the drawbridge into town.

I know it looks short here, but if you view it in fanfiction.net, it's actually longer. Well, what do you think?

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I'm sorry I have to double post, but I have no choice. For no one is replying to the thread. Here's chapter two.

Chapter Two: The King’s rescue

Inside Hyrule Castle Town, the buildings were in ruins and instead of Redeads this time, there were Gibdos situated around the town square, which were tougher. When he and Kelli finally made it to the castle grounds, Link noticed the castle looked almost the same as it had the first time Ganondorf took over. There wasn’t as much lava as there had been last time and the castle itself looked a lot more evilish.
“Link, listen. It’s dark out now so stay close to me”, Kelli told Link.
“But how are we going to get across the lava?”, Link asked. “The bridge that the six sages made last time isn’t there”.
“We won’t need to use the main entrance to get to the dungeon”, Kelli explained. “Zelda showed me a secret entrance from the outside, just incase we would ever have to go there”.
“Where is it?”
“On the bottom of the left side of the castle”.
“But, how will we get to it?”, Link asked.
“I see a column lying on its side across the lava down there”, Kelli replied. “Lava must be shallow”.
“Let’s get down there then”, Link insisted. The two of them then began climbing down the cliff to the bottom. When they were halfway down, Kelli’s right foot broke a piece of a small ledge off. It fell and hit Link in the head.
“Ouch!”, Link shouted.
“Woops, sorry, Link but I can’t get my foot back on!”, Kelli hollered back.
“Can you go any lower?”, Link asked.
“I think I can go a little lower”, Kelli replied.
“Then go as low as you can”, Link told her. “When I get to the bottom, jump off. I’ll catch you, since you’re a girl and you should be lighter than me”.
“Well…okay”, Kelli said as she watched Link go down to the bottom. She shivered as she was looking down. For some reason, Kelli hated heights. She didn’t want to tell anyone, though, because she thought others would think ‘why would a heroine be afraid of heights?’ when she really wasn’t afraid of heights, she only hated them.
When Link made it to the bottom of the cliff, Kelli had gone only a foot lower. Link held out his arms. Kelli nervously jumped off the cliff, but instead of landing in his arms, she landed on his shoulders. After she landed, Link just folded his arms and glanced at her firmly.
“Thanks a lot!”, Link said, feeling silly. Kelli laughed.
“I’m sorry, Link”, she replied. “At least you still caught me”. She climbed off Link’s shoulders.
“Now let’s get to the dungeon. Follow me and stay close. I don’t want you to get lost”, Kelli told Link. He nodded and followed Kelli, being careful not to lose her. She led Link across the column and to the left side of the castle, where the secret entrance was. Kelli opened a hidden door, which on the other side was a staircase. They walked down the staircase until they reached the dungeon.
“Link, it’s really dark down here, so keep close to me and be as quiet as you can”, Kelli said. Link nodded in concern.
Meanwhile, a worried King stood in his cell. He’d been waiting for Kelli to return with Link. Then just moments later, he heard the sound of echoing footsteps.
“Your Majesty, it’s me, Kelli. I have Link with me”, he heard Kelli say.
“Oh thank goodness! I was beginning to worry about you”, the King replied. “Now get me out”. Before Link and Kelli could move, a bunch of Big Skulltulas came swarming down and they jumped out of the way.
“Link, since you don’t have your sword yet, go find a key! I’ll handle these Skulltulas!”, Kelli said to Link, hurriedly. She got out her sword and shield.
“Right!”, Link replied and began looking for a key. He searched high and low, looking under obstacles, near torches, and who knows where else. A few minutes later, Link found a key in a hidden treasure chest.
“Hey, Kelli! I found one!”, Link hollered.
“Good! Unlock the cell door! I’m almost finished with the Big Skulltulas!”, Kelli hollered back. Link quickly ran to the cell door and unlocked it with the key. The King walked out of the cell.
“I thank you two for getting me out”, the King began. “And Link, I have to give this to you. Zelda gave it to me and said I should give it to you so you can get the Master Sword back”. He handed Link the Ocarina of Time.
“The Spiritual Stones are already on the altar”, the King explained. “All you have to do is play the Song of Time”.
“Ok”, Link replied. “Now let’s get out of here”. Then the three of them headed for the staircase.
“By the way, how did you two get in?”, the King wondered.
“We used the secret entrance on the left side of the castle”, Kelli replied.
“But, how did you know about—oh, Zelda”, the King said.
“Yep”, Kelli added. Once they went up the staircase and left the castle dungeon, they crossed the column in the lava. Kelli and Link helped the King get up the cliff, since he couldn’t climb very well.
When they reached the top, they quickly left the castle grounds and entered the Castle Town. Then they dodged the Gibdos and crossed the broken drawbridge into Hyrule Field. They stopped for a minute to take a rest.
“Link, Kelli, listen. You two have jobs to do”, the King began. “Kelli, you need to come with me to Kakariko Village. The villagers and townsfolk need protection until Link can challenge Ganondorf again. With all the monsters out there, who knows what could happen. It is your job Kelli, to protect Kakariko”.
“Yes, your Majesty”, Kelli said politely. The King went on.
“And Link, your job is to free the six sages from their imprisonments. Each will reward you with a Sage Diamond. The Six Sage Diamonds were kept among the sages as power and proof of being a sage. The medallions you had gotten before Link, were only part of the power the sages had. The diamonds contained the other part, which could smite evil, like the Light Arrows could. Except the diamonds’ power was stronger. Each diamond is a different color to represent that sage: Forest, Fire, Water, Shadow, Spirit, and Light”.
“But, what do I do with the diamonds after I get all of them?”, Link asked.
“You must use them and the powers of the Sun and Moon to destroy Ganondorf”, the King replied. “And another thing you need to do is gain the power of the Moon. But you’ll figure out more about this later”.
“Okay”, Link said.
“And I would like to reward you and Kelli for saving me”, the King said. “Here, take these”. Link and Kelli receive the Sun Arrows.
“The Sun Arrows! I’ve been searching for these for a long time! Now that I have them, I truly control the power of the Sun!”, Kelli cried.
“You do?”, Link wondered.
“Yes. I have for seven years, the same amount of time you’ve been the Hero of Time”, Kelli replied.
“You know that?”
“Zelda tells me these things, Link”, Kelli said.
“Oh, then that must also be how you know my name”, Link guessed.
“Yes. And Link, before I go, I need to teach you my song. I’ve hummed this song a lot over the years after I made it up. You can use it to talk to me, if you need advice”, Kelli said and hummed a nice melody, that seemed to have mysterious power. Link raised the Ocarina of Time to his lips and repeated the song perfectly the first time. Link learns Kelli’s Song.
“Always remember this song, Link. It should be of use to you”, Kelli said as she mounted her horse.
“I will, Kelli. But I want to ask you something. When I get around to finding Impa, could you help me since you will be in Kakariko anyway?”, Link asked.
“Sure, Link. Meet me by the well, ok?”, Kelli replied.
“Okay”.
“Now, you go get the Master Sword back”, Kelli told him. Link nodded and waved goodbye as Kelli trotted her horse off towards Kakariko with the King. Then he reentered Hyrule Castle Town.

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I hate to have to post three times in a row, but why isn't there anybody replying to this thread? I know my story is good. All who have read the story like it as far as I know. Is someone on to me or something? And I only posted two chapters, so just give my story a chance. Cool things happen in the end and I wouldn't want anybody to miss out. Especially on the secret about Link's and Kelli's past that Zelda mentions at the end. And for those of you who have read the story and like it, but didn't post, I won't post chapter three until I get some more replies. So somebody please reply!
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Well, someone's reading my story so I'll post chapter three. Here it is.

Chapter Three: The words of the Master Sword

When back in town, Link snuck past the Gibdos and made his way up the stone steps towards the Temple of Time. The temple looked the same as it always had, except with a little evil added to it now. But Link knew nothing could make it impossible for the Ocarina of Time to open the Door of Time, not even evil power. He also knew, since this time he was retrieving the Master Sword at age seventeen, he wouldn’t go through time again.
After he entered, Link walked to the front of the altar, which the three Spiritual Stones rested upon once more. He then took out the Ocarina of Time and raised it to his lips. Soon, the notes of the Song of Time echoed throughout the temple. Then soon enough, the Door of Time opened and Link ran inside to see the Master Sword, laying to rest in the Pedestal of Time. He then walked up to it and pulled the sword. Then all of a sudden, just seconds after he pulled it, Link began to hear a strange voice. At first, he thought the voice was coming from outside just behind the window in the room. Link soon realized the voice was actually coming from the Master Sword!
“Ye who wielded me as the Hero of Time”, the sword began. “Thou must wield me again to destroy the evil that has returned to this land. But my power alone stands no chance, for the evil has grown stronger. Thou must find the lost powers. These powers, with my own, will be strong enough to overthrow this evil. Thou must find the powers of the bright daylight sun and the shineful nighttime moon”. After the Master Sword finished speaking, Link felt so shocked, he could faint. A talking sword? But this was the Master Sword. Link thought for a moment about what the sword said.
“Navi, what do you suppose the sword meant by ‘the lost powers’?”, Link asked.
“I think the sword was referring to the powers of the sun and moon”, Navi replied.
“Wait, I’ve got it! The sword said I would need both powers. That’s why the King said Kelli was going to help me, because she controls the power of the sun”, Link said.
“Hey, that’s right!”, Navi added. “But one question. Where do we find the power of the moon?”
“That’s a good question”, Link replied. “Kelli should know something about it, if she controls the power of the sun”.
“Yeah, let’s go ask her after we get out of town”, Navi suggested. Link nodded and headed outside the Temple of Time. He then went down the stone steps and snuck past the Gibdos again. Then he crossed the broken drawbridge into Hyrule Field.
Once Link stepped off the drawbridge, he raised the ocarina to his lips again and played the notes of Kelli’s Song. Just as he’d finished, Kelli’s voice filled the air.
“Oh hi, Link”, she said. “What advice to you need?”
“Hey, Kelli, the Master Sword talked”, Link replied.
“Really?!”, Kelli sounded surprised. “What did it say?”
“It said I should find the powers of the sun and moon”, Link answered. “You already control the power of the sun, so can you tell me where I can find the power of the moon?”
“You must need to look for the Moon Sword and the Moon Shield, along with the Moon Arrows”, Kelli began. “All I know is the sword and shield were hidden away here in Kakariko somewhere after the Sheikahs died out. I have no clue where the Moon Arrows are though. They could be anywhere. I had to search high and low for the Sun Arrows because they could’ve been anywhere too”.
“Okay, thanks. I’ll keep a look out for the Moon Arrows”, Link promised.
“Anytime, Link. Bye”, Kelli replied. Her voice vanished. Link then mounted Epona and headed for the Kokiri Forest.

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And here's chapter four.

Chapter Four: A Hidden Dungeon

When Link arrived at the entrance to the forest, he dismounted Epona and entered. He crossed the rope bridge in the Lost Woods and entered the Kokiri village. Link guessed Ganondorf had all the sages imprisoned somewhere near each of the temples around Hyrule or near their homes.
Once he entered the village, Link was shocked to see it deserted. There were cobwebs all over the houses and monsters were everywhere.
“Oh no”, Link said, worriedly. “Not again”. He sliced a Big Deku Baba in two and bounced a Deku Nut back at a Mad Scrub.
“I’d rather fight a Stalfos, than these lame monsters”, Link protested. He liked fighting Stalfos. Link thought they were just the type of monster to use his good sword-fighting skills on.
“I see what you mean”, Navi replied. “These monsters are too easy for you to defeat”. After defeating a couple Big Deku Babas and more one Mad Scrub, Link walked near the edge of the pond in front of the shop and saw Octoroks in it. He put up his shield and bounced the rocks back at them.
“Gee, Navi, with all these monsters everywhere, we’ll never find Saria”, Link said.
“Let’s do our best”, Navi replied as Link killed another Mad Scrub that was sitting on the platform in front of the entrance to the Great Deku Tree’s meadow.
After about ten minutes, Link had finally taken out all the monsters and took a little rest. His arm was hurting a little from swinging that sword so much. Then he noticed something peculiar. The Kokiri children didn’t seem to be anywhere.
“Uh-oh, the Kokiri aren’t around”, Link said, looking at the empty village.
“That’s not good. I wonder where they went”, Navi replied. Thinking they were safe inside the houses, Link checked for them just to make sure. He looked in Mido’s house first. No one was there. Then he looked in Saria’s house. Still no one. Link was beginning to get worried. He then checked the shop and the house of Twins and the house of the Know-it-all Brothers. Still, he found no one. Only one house remained unchecked. And that was his own tree house. Link quickly ran to the ladder and climbed up. He entered and found every Kokiri in there, including Mido. Mido gave Link a curious look.
“Have I seen you before?”, he asked. “You look familiar”.
“You’ve seen me more times than you think, Mido”, Link replied.
“I remember now. I saw you in the Lost Woods a while ago”, Mido said. “But…how do you know my name?” Link gave a little smile.
“None of you seem to remember me, or recognize me for that matter”, he said.
“No, but we do recognize you as the Hero of Time”, a Kokiri girl announced.
“Yes, and I came back to save Hyrule again. I came to the forest to find Saria”, Link replied.
“You know Saria?”, Mido asked. “But, how?”
“I’m Link”, he replied. “Does that name ring a bell?”
“Link?!”, the Kokiri all said at the same time. Link nodded.
“Saria and I were friends, remember?”, he said. The Kokiri fell silent.
“Maybe this will convince you”, Link said as he took out the Ocarina of Time and played the nice notes of Saria’s Song.
“Link, it is you!”, a Kokiri boy cried out.
“Yes. I grew up because I’m a Hylian. I was never a Kokiri”, Link told them. “By the way Mido, it wasn’t my fault the Great Deku Tree died. He’d been cursed”.
“Oh, well why didn’t you say so before?”, Mido asked.
“I tried to, but you walked away, remember?”, Link replied.
“Oh, yeah”, Mido said.
“Hey, why are all of you in here?”, Link wondered.
“It’s safer up here, because the monsters out there can’t climb”, Mido answered. “And some of us missed you”.
“Oh. Well I have to go now”, Link said. “Bye”. Link quickly walked out of the tree house and climbed down the ladder. More monsters had appeared. Link decided to just dodge them and start looking for Saria. He searched the Lost Woods and the Sacred Forest Meadow first. No Saria. He looked in the Great Deku Tree’s Meadow next. Still no Saria. He decided to look around the Forest Training Center next. When he got there, he didn’t notice anything strange, but when he took a peek behind the house of the Know-it-all Brothers, he saw a hidden hole in the ground that he’d never seen before. He quickly jumped into the hole and landed with a plop on the bottom. After he got up, Link was amazed at what he saw. He was in the main room of an underground dungeon.

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Chapter five is ready to go. And here it is.

Chapter Five: The Underground Forest Dungeon

After Link had landed, he got up and brushed himself off. He was amazed at what he was looking at.
“Wow, Kelli’s got to know about this!”, Link said as he took out the Ocarina of Time and played Kelli’s Song. Soon, Kelli’s voice filled the air again.
“Oh, hello Link!”, she said. “What is it?”
“Kelli, you’re not going to believe this, but I went down a hidden hole and there’s a whole dungeon down there with chambers and treasure chests and everything!”, Link replied.
“Really?”
“Yeah, and I have a feeling Saria’s down here somewhere”.
“I think you might find all the sages in hidden dungeons, Link”, Kelli said. “And when I say hidden, I mean hidden, so you’ll have to look hard for them”.
“I see what you mean. This hole was behind the house of the Know-it-all Brothers”, Link replied. “Anyway, thanks for the tip”.
“Anytime, Link”, Kelli said and her voice vanished.
As Link browsed through the first chamber of the Underground Forest Dungeon, he noticed it looked unbelievably similar to the Forest Temple.
“Hey Navi, this place reminds me of the Forest Temple”, Link said.
“Yeah, me too. Weird”, Navi replied.
“Okay, we’re going to search this place top to bottom for Saria, so let’s start looking”, Link announced.
“Right”, Navi agreed. Then the two of them entered another room and kept an eye out for Saria as they explored the dungeon. They searched and explored every single room they could get into, from small, unimportant rooms to the biggest, unbelievable rooms around. Twice they met up with some mini-boss Stalfos. Link really had fun killing them, of course. It was true he could practice well when fighting them. They met up with a lot of Blue and Green Bubbles, which were quite easy to kill. Along the way, Link found the map and compass, which he had to kill some Big Skulltulas to get to.
When he was nearing the final room, Link came upon a bright yellow and blue treasure chest, which looked very familiar.
“I bet I know what’s in that chest”, Link said, as he walked up to it. He opened it to reveal the Boss Key.
“You know what, Navi? I think Saria’s locked up in the boss room and being guarded by the boss”, Link stated.
“I’ll bet anything you’re right”, Navi replied.
“According to the map, the door to the boss room is in the next chamber”, Link announced, looking at the map. Then the two of them entered the next room, where a third pair of Stalfos resided. Link immediately put a smile on his face. He liked being able to use skills like back flips, side jumps, and agility during battle. After defeating the Stalfos, Link unlocked the door to the boss room and entered.
Inside the boss room, the light was dim and there was some fog on the ground. Link just barely noticed something at the other end of the room. It looked like someone locked in a cell. When Link looked closer at the figure, he realized it was Saria. Link started running towards her to get her attention. But when he was half-way there, something suddenly knocked him out of the way. When Link stood up, he saw in front of him, a giant skeleton armed with a sword and shield. It looked like a creepier version of a Stalfos. The skeleton also had a little bit of armor. It waved it’s sword around in the air and made a loud noise that sounded similar to Odolwa’s from the Woodfall Temple in Termina.
“Uh-oh, Link! Be careful! That’s Tamuda, the monster skeleton warrior!”, Navi warned.
“Monster is right!”, Link shouted back as Tamuda slowly crept towards him. “How am I supposed to attack him when he’s got that armor?”
“Attack him the same way you did Odolwa!”, Navi replied. Link nodded and dodged Tamuda’s first attack. Link rolled between his legs and slashed his back with his sword. Tamuda roared in pain, the same way Phantom Ganon from the Forest Temple did for some odd reason. Link then took out his bow and fired an arrow towards Tamuda’s chest bones. It stunned him, but not for long. Link ran over to slash him again, but he was too late.
“Link, be careful! Tamuda has great strength!”, Navi gave another warning. Before Link could even slice him once, Tamuda grabbed him by the left leg and threw him across the room.
“AAAHHH! Ah!”, Link screamed as he soared through the air and landed with a thump on the floor. “I see what you mean”.
After Link got up, he ran over to Tamuda and rolled between his legs again. This time, he shot Tamuda with an arrow again and sliced him five times.
“Link!”, Saria finally noticed who Tamuda was trying to fight. Just after Tamuda turned around to face Link, he swung his sword at him.
“Link, duck!”, Saria and Navi happened to yell at the same time. Link did duck and as he did, he did a thrust attack, which got Tamuda just below his chest bones. Link then fired another arrow and stunned Tamuda, and being quick about it, he rolled between his legs again and sliced him eight times. Suddenly, Tamuda let out a loud bellow, and fell apart, bones falling to the floor. Saria let out a sigh of relief.
“That wasn’t too hard”, Link said, glancing at Navi. He quickly ran over to Saria’s cell.
“Link, shoot the lock with a Light Arrow!”, Saria hollered. Link nodded and fired a Light Arrow at the lock, destroying it. The cell door opened and Saria ran out.
“Link, thank you for saving me”, Saria said. “That huge bag of bones scared me half to death the first time I saw it”.
“I can see why”, Link replied. “A giant skeleton is bound to scare anyone”.
Saria went on. “Link, I must tell you something”.
“What?”
“Ganondorf thinks Zelda has the Ocarina of Time and that’s why he kidnapped her again.”, Saria said. Link’s eyes grew wide.
“Are you serious?”, he asked. Saria nodded. “He’s in for a big surprise then, because I have the ocarina again”.
“He thinks if Zelda has the ocarina, you can’t get the Master Sword back and there for, won’t be able to fight him again”, Saria explained. “If he finds out Zelda doesn’t have the ocarina, he’ll be furious and know you’ll most likely have it”.
“He’ll probably attack again, too”, Link added.
“Exactly”, Saria said. “So you’d better hurry to free the rest of the sages. And I would like to reward you for freeing me with this”. Saria handed Link a bright green diamond-shaped stone that had the same symbol as the Forest Medallion had on it.
“Is this the Forest Diamond?”, Link asked, gazing at the slight green glow that the diamond had.
“Yes. It contains part of the power that helped us sages seal away Ganondorf the first time you defeated him”, Saria replied.
“Let’s get out of here now”, Link said. “I see one of those blue portals over there”. Then Link and Saria walked over to the portal and stepped inside it.

Well, Link has just completed the first dungeon. What do you think?
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It's pretty interesting. The characters need to be developed, but I can see where you could take this. Keep up the good work!
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It's pretty interesting. The characters need to be developed, but I can see where you could take this. Keep up the good work!

Oh, don't worry. Kelli might not seem to be well developed at first, but once we progress more into the story, we discover more about her and what's unique about her. So you'll see how well I've developed her later on. I worked hard coming up with a good appearance for Kelli and her horse and there's a very special reason why she's developed the way she is. And I'll have chapter six done in a jiffy.
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Chapter six is finally here!

Chapter Six: Up Death Mountain

Just as Link and Saria landed next to the hole, they noticed the forest was back to normal. It looked as if nothing happened.
“Saria!”, a voice yelled in the distance. It was Mido.
“Oh Saria, we were getting worried sick about you!”, Mido panted as he ran up to them. “And Link, we thank you big time for saving her!”
“Hey, I’m just doing my job. I’m a hero”, Link replied.
“You certainly are”, Saria agreed. “But, Mido, how do you recognize him?”
“Well, at first, I didn’t exactly recognize him”, Mido replied.
“Yeah”, Link added. “I found him and the other Kokiri in my tree house”.
“Mido and the other Kokiri, in your house?!”, Saria said and then started laughing.
“Very funny”, Link said sarcastically.
“No, I didn’t mean it that way, Silly”, Saria stopped laughing. “I meant it’s kind of funny to find Mido in your house, considering the fact he picked on you when you were a kid”.
“That’s true”, Link agreed. “Well, I have to go now. Friends forever, right?”
“Right!”, Saria answered. “Bye!” Link waved good bye as he left the forest.
Once back in Hyrule Field, Link mounted Epona.
“Our next stop is Death Mountain”, Link announced as he rode off.
“That mountain is huge. I bet it’s going to take forever to find Darunia”, Navi protested.
“I know, but I have a pretty good idea of where the next dungeon is”, Link said.
“Death Mountain Crater?”, Navi guessed.
“Yep”, Link replied. “By the way, how do you know about Odolwa, Navi?”
“That’s easy. Link, haven’t you noticed I know about pretty much all monsters?”, Navi said.
“Yeah, as a matter of fact, I have”, Link answered.
“Plus, I met this fairy named Tatl during my search for you”, Navi explained. “I told her I was looking for you and she said she knew you and told me about your adventure in Termina. She seemed to be in a hurry to get somewhere”.
“Oh, I should have known that fairy would blab about that all over the place”, Link said. When they arrived at the entrance to Kakariko Village, Link dismounted Epona and entered. Link stopped dead in his tracks when he saw what was happening.
“What the…?”, Link said as he saw the King run behind the Shooting Gallery.
Villagers were fleeing in peril and a huge Lizard-like monster was attacking. Link couldn’t help but stare in amazement when the monster was near the well, Kelli standing in front of it. The monster slowly walked towards her, and then she ran up the stairs by the house nearby and ran up the roof. Kelli jumped.
“HAAAAH!!”, Kelli yelled as Link saw her flip in the air twice and do a vertical stab in the monster’s right shoulder with her sword. After she stabbed the monster, Kelli did another two flips over the monster’s left shoulder and landed on the ground. By now Link’s mouth was hanging open. He couldn’t believe what he’d just seen.
“C’mon Link, snap out of it!”, Navi said as she flew in front of Link’s face. Link shook his head.
“Hey! Not so close!”, he replied.
“Sorry, but we need to get up the mountain!”, Navi insisted.
“Wait! Look!”, Link pointed to Kelli’s sword and shield. There was a small picture of a sun on the sword’s hilt and an identical design on the shield. That sun looked awfully familiar. Link decided to worry about that later. He quickly ran to the Death Mountain gate, being careful not to be seen. Before he entered, Link caught a glimpse of Kelli shooting the monster’s chest with an arrow, which appeared to be a Sun Arrow. Hoping Kelli can destroy that monster, Link quickly entered the gate and ran up the trail.
When he arrived at the entrance to the Dodongo’s Cavern, Link stopped to catch his breath.
“Gee, that monster looked pretty tough. You think Kelli can take care of it?”, Link panted.
“By the looks of her sword-fighting, I think she could take out a monster twice as tough”, Navi replied.
Just as Link was about to continue up the trail, the Goron sitting in front of the Dodongo’s Cavern noticed him.
“Link! Thank goodness you’re here!”, the Goron said.
“What? What’s going on?”, Link wondered.
“Something’s happening in Goron City. You must get up there right away!”, the Goron replied.
“What’s happening?!”, Link asked, eagerly.
“You’ll find out when you get there, just hurry!”, the Goron insisted.
Link nodded and ran up the trail towards Goron City as fast as he could. Once there, he entered and was once again shocked. Gorons were fleeing in terror. Big Skulltulas and Fire Keese were everywhere, destroying everything in their paths. Link immediately took out his bow and fired arrow after arrow killing the Big Skulltulas first and then the Fire Keese. The Gorons were endlessly panicking, though the monsters’ numbers were being reduced. One Goron was lying wounded near the doorway of Darunia’s room. Link immediately knew who this Goron was: Darunia’s son, whose name was also Link. He quickly went down to him to see if he was okay.
“L-Link, is that...you?”, the little Goron whimpered.
“Yes, it’s me. Let me get you inside Darunia’s room”, Link replied.
“Th-thanks”, the Goron whimpered again as Link hauled him into Darunia’s room.
“Link…my dad…is g-gone”, the Goron said. Link put him next to one of the tables.
“I know. I’m going to save him right now”, he said. The Goron fell unconscious. Link slipped into his Goron Tunic and pulled out the statue that blocked the secret entrance to the Death Mountain Crater. Then, he entered.

Well are we looking forward to seeing Link rescue Darunia? Let's hope he does. By the way, remember the part where Link had gotten the Ocarina of Time from the King and he said Zelda had it? Wonder how she got it? This is the mystery of the story. Clues to how Link got the ocarina back to her are given in some of the chapters and you'll find clue #1 in this chapter during Navi's explanation of how she knows of Odolwa. Once the story is finished and all the clues are given, tell me if you think you have the answer. Have fun!
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Okay, I'm not gonna post chapter seven until I get at least one more reply. So for those of you who want to know what happens next, give me a reply. Oh and another thing, for those who read the entire story, after it is finished, I'm gonna write a bonus story that goes along with this one. I won't reveal what it is called yet. It is a surprise. It is only for those who read the ENTIRE story. You won't understand it if you read it before you finish reading Newfound Powers.
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Okay, I'm not gonna post chapter seven until I get at least one more reply. So for those of you who want to know what happens next, give me a reply. Oh and another thing, for those who read the entire story, after it is finished, I'm gonna write a bonus story that goes along with this one. I won't reveal what it is called yet. It is a surprise. It is only for those who read the ENTIRE story. You won't understand it if you read it before you finish reading Newfound Powers.
I must say, that's a selfish view. I could say "I'll review your story only if you review mine", because mine has only one review, but I'm a nice guy.

Your story is a cut above the mediocrity that is placed on these boards ever so often. I think you know what I mean. But seriously, I like it. You seem to know what you're doing as a writer. I have one bit of advice for you, and it's something I need to work on, too: slow it down! You rock when it comes to talking and interacting, but in action scenes, it just speeds by. This is a common problem, I realize. Try putting more detail into Link's battles, alright? For example, instead of:

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This time, he shot Tamuda with an arrow again and sliced him five times.
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As Link frantically scanned the beast Tamuda, searching for a weakpoint, his eyes grazed upon the monster's unguarded leg. Almost automatically, his arrow swung towards the right leg of Tamuda. The bowstring vibrated as a small, pointed wooden arrow shot like a rocket at the Monster Skeleton Warrior. As the arrow connected, Tamuda felt his body numb. He frantically twitched, knowing that he could do nothing to stop the pain. Easily taking advantage of this situation, Link raced forward, frantically hacking at the monster's leg. And then, finally, Tamuda's leg swung, catapaulting Link backward.
Now, don't use my writing as the be-all and end-all, but I'm just demonstrating how much detail you could put into battles, and make your good writing great! And, as Obsidian said, Kelli is underdeveloped, but as you assured she will be well-developed later on, and now she's supposed to be mysterious, well, more power to ya!

Now, please go and review Curse of the Hand: Betrayal. Hey, I scratch your back, you scratch mine.
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I must say, that's a selfish view. I could say "I'll review your story only if you review mine", because mine has only one review, but I'm a nice guy.

Your story is a cut above the mediocrity that is placed on these boards ever so often. I think you know what I mean. But seriously, I like it. You seem to know what you're doing as a writer. I have one bit of advice for you, and it's something I need to work on, too: slow it down! You rock when it comes to talking and interacting, but in action scenes, it just speeds by. This is a common problem, I realize. Try putting more detail into Link's battles, alright? For example, instead of:


You might put:

Now, don't use my writing as the be-all and end-all, but I'm just demonstrating how much detail you could put into battles, and make your good writing great! And, as Obsidian said, Kelli is underdeveloped, but as you assured she will be well-developed later on, and now she's supposed to be mysterious, well, more power to ya!

Now, please go and review Curse of the Hand: Betrayal. Hey, I scratch your back, you scratch mine.

Now I have no idea what you mean by "my story is a cut above mediocrity", but to tell you the truth, well, I always thought a developed character had plenty of things that were unique about that character, like for example, here's what's unique about Kelli:
1. Hyrule's only heroine(and I mean the kind Link is not the kind Zelda is)
2. Has mysterious mental and physical powers
3. Teal colored eyes(at first Link thinks her eyes are the same color as his, but at the end he sees they aren't)
4. The only one who knows the true history of the hidden powers(you know, sun and moon)
5. the only person to have been feared of as a ten-year-old(this will be explained later in the story)
6.
There is a #6, I just won't reveal it, because I don't want to spoil the great surprise at the end of the story(no it's not the ZeLink romance, it's something else). And you seem to be saying that what I what I think is a developed character is wrong. So if I'm wrong, what's right? And about the first boss battle, I don't think you read the whole thing correctly. I put in as much detail as possible and also, Tamuda has the same type of fighting as Odolwa did, so there wasn't too much detail to it. And I did have Tamuda pick up Link by the left leg and throw him. And what about the cool move I came up with for Kelli? It's just one move, though, but she is one heck of a sword fighting girl during dungeon #4(she helps Link in this one). One more thing, I've never found any Curse of the Hand betrayal story in the list. Believe me, I haven't yet read any stories that I think are worth reviewing.

P.S. Chapter seven is on its way to being finished, so stay tuned for it!
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Now I have no idea what you mean by "my story is a cut above mediocrity", but to tell you the truth, well, I always thought a developed character had plenty of things that were unique about that character, like for example, here's what's unique about Kelli:
1. Hyrule's only heroine(and I mean the kind Link is not the kind Zelda is)
2. Has mysterious mental and physical powers
3. Teal colored eyes(at first Link thinks her eyes are the same color as his, but at the end he sees they aren't)
4. The only one who knows the true history of the hidden powers(you know, sun and moon)
5. the only person to have been feared of as a ten-year-old(this will be explained later in the story)
6.
There is a #6, I just won't reveal it, because I don't want to spoil the great surprise at the end of the story(no it's not the ZeLink romance, it's something else). And you seem to be saying that what I what I think is a developed character is wrong. So if I'm wrong, what's right? And about the first boss battle, I don't think you read the whole thing correctly. I put in as much detail as possible and also, Tamuda has the same type of fighting as Odolwa did, so there wasn't too much detail to it. And I did have Tamuda pick up Link by the left leg and throw him. And what about the cool move I came up with for Kelli? It's just one move, though, but she is one heck of a sword fighting girl during dungeon #4(she helps Link in this one). One more thing, I've never found any Curse of the Hand betrayal story in the list. Believe me, I haven't yet read any stories that I think are worth reviewing.

P.S. Chapter seven is on its way to being finished, so stay tuned for it!
It's probably on the 2nd page by now. And, by a cut above mediocrity, I meant your story is better than some posted on this site.
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